Leah Goodman

Broken English

At my age and level of immaturity as a writer, I honestly feel unworthy to critique such a well-composed story.

Broken English is my favorite story that I have come across on this site so far, and the only one, at this point, that I truly feel is flawless. From the realistic depiction of such a dire and depressive situation to the humanity, struggle, and imperfection of our protagonist in his quest to get back home to his family, this story will constantly have you on your toes. I was hanging on every word from start to finish. I went through so many emotions. And you do a brilliant job of bringing your characters to life; I was able to get so close and attatched to these characters in a time that seemed to fly by as I could not seem to stop reading.

You approach this subject matter in such a compassionate and truthful way. The way that you use your words as an art, I always had a vivid picture of what was happening in my mind--down to the salad tongs mentioned in the very first chapter. It is the details and the small things that build up and make a cohesive painting so beautiful. You are a true artist.

I am not sure why I am seeing this on Inkitt instead of a shelf at Barnes and Noble but I hope that that soon changes!

Awesome!

The plot is incredibly strong and creative. I'm not sure if I've ever come across a story with such a variety of unexpected components and twists and turns. Style is unique and intriguing. A few grammar mistakes but we all have those, nothing major. Great work!!

Highly Recommend

This is an intricately woven masterpiece full of twists and turns, approached by a hard-hitting, unique style to bring a brand new voice and perspective to the vampire genre. Honestly, it is beyond me how this isn't on shelves yet. GREAT work!!!

Beautiful

This is perfect in a unique, unconventional way. The poetry is so honest and your style is so amazing. Had me wanting more. I would highly recommend!

Must Read

This story is an unconventional tale that beautifully combines horror/suspense and spirituality.

The protagonist is a direct representation of what it is to be human and to be religious; acknowledging his imperfections while showing us that it's okay not to be perfect.

It's interesting to see how Tyler perceives himself, and how we perceive him-- and how different the two of those concepts actually are. He sees himself as imperfect and lost and we see him as, yes, imperfect. but finding his way slowly but surely, despite all that he is dealing with.

I love the fresh insight and depth that this story gives to what is is like to be Christian and I absolutely love the unique idea of adding a supernatural aspect to it. The plot is to die for.

I think this is the type of story that the world needs. It's not like anything I've read before, especially works that have to do with religion.

I can't wait to see what else you have in store. I am thoroughly appalled and impressed by your talent. 😊💞

Brilliant

We have a bestseller on our hands. You'll hang on every word and you better stop whatever you're doing because you aren't gonna want to put this book down once you've started. A brilliantly crafted roller coaster. I'm not quite sure why this hasn't hit shelves yet but I hope it does in the near future. Absolutely wonderful.

Beyond

This story has an amazing plot, portrayed by an intriguing style and it's only four chapters so far! I can only imagine the places that this story is going to go. Highly recommend!

Near Perfect

Extremely well thought-out, interesting plot, displayed beautifully by a smooth and sophisticated writing style. Relatable and realistic characters that have your attention from the very first word. Fantastic!