Broken English
At my age and level of immaturity as a writer, I honestly feel unworthy to critique such a well-composed story.
Broken English is my favorite story that I have come across on this site so far, and the only one, at this point, that I truly feel is flawless. From the realistic depiction of such a dire and depressive situation to the humanity, struggle, and imperfection of our protagonist in his quest to get back home to his family, this story will constantly have you on your toes. I was hanging on every word from start to finish. I went through so many emotions. And you do a brilliant job of bringing your characters to life; I was able to get so close and attatched to these characters in a time that seemed to fly by as I could not seem to stop reading.
You approach this subject matter in such a compassionate and truthful way. The way that you use your words as an art, I always had a vivid picture of what was happening in my mind--down to the salad tongs mentioned in the very first chapter. It is the details and the small things that build up and make a cohesive painting so beautiful. You are a true artist.
I am not sure why I am seeing this on Inkitt instead of a shelf at Barnes and Noble but I hope that that soon changes!
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