LEBridgstock

Great read!

I have just finished reading this book and I was hooked all the way through. Your characters are great and although at first I thought that the story might be a little cliché, it was actually really original. I think the world you have created is very interesting and I can't wait to see more. There are a few places throughout that may benefit from a read-through as they are a little bit unclear and could maybe be improved with a bit of added description, but this is really not a big issue at all. On the whole, the story is very well written and fun to read. Great work :)

Nice Characters

I am currently about half way through chapter 9, and I am liking how the story is going so far. You have developed your characters well and I am getting a good sense of the individual personalities. I like the supernatural elements of the story. Overall it reads well and your spelling and grammar is good. I also like how the friendship between the two is developing so far. Interested to see where this is going.

Promising start

I think that this is a promising start to a story. I like the magic element and the different characters, The author's writing style is pretty easy to read and follow. To improve I would suggest a read through as there is the occasional small typo (nothing major). Also I think some things in the story happen a little suddenly but that is probably just personal preference. Overall I think this is a good read and has a lot of potential to continue into a really great story. I am interested to see how it turns out. :)

Original Idea

I am currently about half way through this story but I am really loving the overall concept. There are a lot of stories in this genre, however this one is very original and has a lot of different ideas that I have not seen before. I like the idea of the genetic modifications. Your spelling and grammar is good and I like the way you describe things. I got an especially good picture of the school. The story may benefit from a read through as some bits are just a little bit confusing to follow (such as when the farm is first introduced) but this is not a big issue and does not interfere with the overall reading. Great work :)

Original plot

I am currently reading chapter six of this story and I am finding it quite interesting so far. I really like how you have thought of all of the very different characters and the perspective switching between them is good. The

plot is different to a lot of things that I have read and has some unique qualities. I love the idea of a giant snake! Your spelling and grammar is mostly very good. To improve, I would suggest maybe breaking up some of the larger paragraphs into smaller parts so that they are easier to follow. :)

Nice poem

This is a nice poem with an uplifting feel to it I think. It ends on a good positive note, leaving you with a smile. I admit I do not usually see much poetry on this site, but it makes a refreshing change to see something a bit different. I don't know much about the technical side of poetry, so all I can really say on that front is that it read well for me. Great work :-)

Amazing fantasy world.

I love this story so much. It is a little bit like a cross between Narnia and Alice in Wonderland, but it is completely unique and new. I love the characters and the descriptions are exquisite. You get a good sense of all the different places that the characters travel to, so you can imagine them actually going on their adventure. I also like the intriguing mystery of the Grandmother.

I think a few bits of the plot could be improved a little- there is no big issue but there is a lot of characters and things happening all at once, so in some places you could maybe add in a little bit more just to clarify what is going on with everyone.

Overall, I think this is a brilliant story and I would definitely recommend to anyone considering reading.

Good read.

I am currently on chapter 10 but I am enjoying the story so far. I like the concept of the story, the idea of revenge makes it more interesting and gives the characters some good motivation. Overall, the spelling and grammar is good which makes it easy to read. I think it could maybe be improved in some places by adding a bit of detail about the surroundings and the experiences of the characters, e.g. what can they see/hear/smell etc? What does their surroundings look like? Is it warm/cold/rainy etc? This would fill in the world a little more and make it easier to imagine. I am excited to see how this story turns out, I will keep reading :)

Excellent sequel!

I am loving this story so far, I really cannot wait to see how it turns out! You have me completely drawn into the story and I love all the characters. I am quite a critical reader but I have nothing to say about this story apart from I hope you can write some more soon :)

Great writing style!

I am just beginning chapter four but I just wanted to say that I am really enjoying this story so far. You have a really excellent writing style that really helps me to get a good sense of the world and what is happening. I like the characters so far and I am interested to see where the story will go. The spelling and grammar I also good which makes it more pleasant to read.

*Edit*
I have now finished the book and I just wanted to say again how excellent it is! It has a very professional feel to it and the way you have created a fully formed world is brilliant. I hope to see what the future holds for these characters.