Liese

I have a creative suggestion - the denser text and its ideas on war could be given to a story within a story as dialogue flashbacks to the historic two queens and their male war council - it would allow your ideas to be in characters rather than the extended thoughts of the lead alone. They are often long and dense. [very thoughtful points though]
Also, those background stories of the girls growing up in happier times- would round the story and make the loss more poignant- all your call-its your story. you metion the girl in the monsoon rain but don't fully develop it .

I wrote a review and comments. I hope you write more and post on inkitt- you write well.