Malia Porter

19. INFP. Lover of Rain. Wannabe Screenwriter.

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Loved it!

I think you have great voice in your writing, and I liked just how in depth you got into the thoughts of Snape as he started to lower his walls for Hermione.

The only issue I found is that I found their relationship a little too sped up. From my understanding the story's time span is, at the most, a week? I think it's a little fast for them to be so in love BUT I still thought it was adorable.

Great job, and keep up the good work(:

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