Under the Moonlight; Alpha's Bride
Usually, I have a well-defined idea when I write a review, but with this book; my mind is all over the place.
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The premise is intriguing, setup is well done as well, but then the story goes in another direction. One I understand, but didn't want to read. The two timelines (three months apart from each other) seem te contradict. In the past, he is heavily depending on the bond with her and three months later he discards and neglects her, because an old tradition, which is still unexplained (so far in the available chapters on Inkitt).
The writing style is a bit chaotic. It reads like there has been some semi-editing done, for example: "I walked out of the room, perplexed, looking around. I walked downstairs and saw my mother's leg chained in the heavy chain that was impossible to break, her orange hair tangled, she was in the nightgown, and fear in my mother's eyes."
This is part of a scene which reads as a flashback, turns out to be a recurring dream, but nothing like what actually happened in Xavier's past. It was difficult to follow. I would advise to adjust the text a little, like: 'Always, she was wearing the same nightgown', 'I already knew the chain was impossible to break from previous experience', 'Every time, I had to leave her like that, it breaks me more until there is nothing left.' (just some ideas)
The other moment I was confused was the conversation with Felix in the dungeon. I had not realized they moved from the packhouse to the jail. Maybe add a sentence there to clarify?
For now, I unlisted the book. I want to wait until the writer edited the basics (like: 'Sansa Scoffed' and the previous mentioned half edited sentences), before I start again. Feel free to contact me!