Marvelle Petit

Texas

Author, fangirl, gamer, wannabe chef, tea addict, teaware addict, otome game addict, art addict, and other geeky things.

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I don't like reviewing based on the first chapter. I wanted you to continue this story, and I wanted to provide encouragement for that, so forgive me about the stars. It's not indicative of how I feel about it. The first chapter is a little short, and all I really read was some whiny teenager ranting the entire time, so I don't really have a feel for the plot. You do have some nice imagery in the piece, and I enjoyed those moments. In the future, I would advise leaving a stronger hook on the first chapter to entice readers to follow your story. I want to read the rest of this story, but I'm not hooked enough to follow it directly, only every once in awhile "check and see" sort of thing, or read it all once you've finished. Do finish this, and let the world read your work!

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