Matt Rise

A non-English speaking writer who is trying to write his first novel in English. I'm also a fan of manga and anime. Ch > 80 Update: scheduled date and month. [Chapters Finale] Stay tuned!๐Ÿ˜โ˜•๐Ÿ‘Œ

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Was not expecting that! ๐Ÿคญ๐Ÿ‘

I like this short story, no doubt about that, and the plot is nice too. Very good.
The writing style is good although I gave it four stars not because the writing style is bad or anything but because the writer decided to make the story a bit shorter.
Nice one indeed and the ending is full of surprises.๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ‘

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Despite the story having a beginning but as I read along, somehow I feel like I found myself already in the middle of a wider or longer story that was not written since the whole story itself is a short story consisting only of 16 chapters. It made me a bit perplexed for a while.
The overall story is interesting and the writer can drive the reader's mind well by taking them further deeper. to introduce the main characters, Marshal and Larna. The latter remains a mystery until the end but the reader will know something about her as they read along. Like who she is and what happens and so on? Also, to marshal.
Although this story is only 16 chapters, once you read it, you can't stop until you finished the whole 16 chapters to know the ending.

Next, I want to explain these two points:
1. I gave 4 stars to the overall story because it didn't mention where and when the story took place and that limited my imagination while reading and also the unwritten story gap that I felt.
At one point, Marshal looks at a window and there is a spider web followed by a joke. For this part, I didn't get what it meant in relation to the overall story. It also points out the story happened. in spring or summer.
2. I gave 5 stars to the plot because it makes me keep guessing whether this or that. will happen which I cannot mention.

A good short story to read and hopefully, the writer will produce more short stories in the future.
Lastly, thank you for letting me read your book and review it.

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