Great Start
It’s important to mention that I am writing this review when the story has just started and I’ll definitely keep reading as it is updated and possibly change my review if needed. The plot has gotten me hooked from the start and I think the author does a good job going into detail. The author’s style of writing is also great. The only problem that I had were the comma splices and run on sentences; which to me, interfered with the emotions that the reader might have felt if it were better written. This however, doesn’t cause any type of confusion in where the story is going or what the author is trying to portray.
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Your short story was well written. It had just enough detail for us to understand the characteristics of the protagonist and the setting. There wasn’t any grammar mistakes that stood out or interfered with the meaning. I think your sentence structure also helped build up more information about the character and plot which was a good move. Great job!
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