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It's just one of these stories that seems to flow, despite the flashbacks and the present being in the same chapter. I can't remember spotting a single grammar error (although I don't exactly hunt or these kinds of things) and the structure was a close to perfect as you could get whilst keeping the story... well, a story.
I like how even the darkest parts are broken up with a bit of light-hearted humour -whether that was the author's intention, or it was because I am that type of person who just finds something funny despite the morbidity of it. The romance within it is light and the increase of it is gradual - it isn't one of those slam-dunk sort of romance books, which makes it a nice change. The overall pace of the story was perfect; nor too fast and not too slow.
And seeing as the Pitch-and-Character romance stories are quite rare, it makes this story all the better. To be honest, I think I might have found it earlier, but back then I hadn't thought of reviewing it as I was mostly just skimming through stories. However, I am definitely glad I came across this gem. Nothing in this story was something I would regret. Most stories I have read have the Guardians readily trusting Pitch and the paranoia, hatred and stubbornness in them in this story is a welcomed thing - it is much closer to how the Guardians had viewed Pitch in the movie. Pitch's stubbornness, smugness and overall foolishness within the story, along with his darker side were well-balanced. As for the change within him towards the end, it isn't rushed and overall, makes Artemis' death a more heart-breaking moment. Although, boy was I relieved that she came back.
So yeah... basically, this story is brilliantly thought out, brilliantly written and if the author could keep up this standard - or even get better - I think they will be deserving of every positive review they get.
P.S. - Uh... is it a bad thing that I can't come up with any negative thing, or a field that needs to be improved in?
I had never thought that a story about a girl entering a beauty pageant would be this exciting and funny. I love the ending, though I almost thought for a second that she would have ended up with Parker. Still, I prefer her and Harrison. I also like how this story isn't too rushed or too slow-paced and how the main character develops into a more confident person. Though maybe you could have made Lesly a more cunning and vengeful girl... nah, that would have completely changed the story. It's brilliant as it is.
There really isn't a flaw I could point out, although then again, I'm not exactly a great critic.
When Words Come First - Review
So far, a very intriguing story about something most people don't tend to write about. They wrote it in a way that included a lot of the characters from the 'Penguins of Madagascar' series and kept it interesting all the way through. Also They've made the relation ships interesting amongst the characters and they've built them up casually and not in a rushed manner.Read the story now
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