Michael Rains

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Good story, but needs editing

I was intrigued by the beginning of the story for sure. The memory loss and disaster were done well, and soon more characters came along, expanding things and adding more and more backstory. However a lot of editing is needed because the chapters are too long. The story is interesting so I always want to see what is happening but there is too much information along the way. Simply chopping out a lot of random details would bring out the story much better. So far I've finished chapter 6 and will keep going.

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