Hard to Read and Understand
Overall the story is alright, I only made it to Chapter 24 before I gave up trying to understand it, It's very hard to read.
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You have no idea who is actually speaking or who's Perspective it is. Or anything really. Everything is I. Who is I? Who is speaking when? I have no idea it's too hard to follow.
The story itself is good but I won't give it a higher rating since it is hard to follow and keep everything straight.
I should be use for only the person of who's perspective is it coming from. But in this story you can't tell.
The Author doesn't say who is speaking really and the " " Are all over the place and never where they are supposed to be.
I'll change the rating and overall the review if the story gets a major clean up so it's easier to read and understand.
I'm sorry I really am but I'm only being honest. I can't get past Chapter 24 because it's giving me a headache trying to keep who is speaking straight and who's Perspective it's coming from.