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Well written romance

I liked this story. The plot was well structured and had some movement and character development. The characters seemed like real people. It was well written with a flowing style and had clearly been edited effectively. It reminded me of Judy Blume's books, which made me wonder about the target audience. It seemed like a young adult novel, rather than one for adults. What irritated me was that in a similar way to Judy Blume, your characters all seem to come from a privileged background; no-one really seems to have any character flaw, and to me this is not interesting enough. And linked to this, I see no reason for any of the characters to like, or love each other. I wonder what does Grace like about Spencer? All she says is that he is beautiful. It is like the kind of crush you get on someone when you are young (as Grace is) which eventually turns into nothing when you grow up and find out what love really is. Of course, Grace does not get to grow up, which would make a very interesting angle to a story. I find it difficult to accept also that Spencer loves Leah and not Grace. Why does he? Anyway, as I said, I liked the story, otherwise it would not have raised so many questions. I think is is easily as good as many published books. Good luck with it. Naomi : )

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Difficult to read

This is the first story I read on Inkitt and having now read some others I would really like to comment on this one. This story is very difficult to read. From the beginning I did not know what the genre was and reading more, I found I was very confused. It came across as sci-fi, but then had references to dollars and more real world things, but the reality of it was not at all believable. It was just confusing. This story is not punctuated correctly, especially the speech and there are words used that are just mistakes (the meaning of the word does not fit the context). There is also much too much dialogue and not enough description, this leading to a lot of the confusion. This story needs to be re-written, edited and proofread carefully. There are some interesting ideas in it, but I did not finish it because I could not follow the story. Naomi xxx

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