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Outliers

The book is so intriguing. I love the story lines and the cliff hangers. I can't wait for the next chapter. Nicely done.

This Is soooooo good!!!!

I love this so much! I feel for Katarina! Oh my I really hope she escapes from Dmitri's clutches! I am adding the second book to my library!

If you enjoy suspense, love story, with angst, you will definitely enjoy this book!

Well written

Though only two chapters have been published, I have to say that the story starts off very well. It is well written with very little grammatical mistakes. The author also does a nice job of describing the scenes. It makes it easy for me to imagine it.

Catching

I love the plot of the story, and the time period where it is set. The story starts of with an action, which did well to hold my interest.

Things I think the author should look at:

There is a lot of telling and not more of showing. At times it reads as if the author is narrating the story. If that is your writing style, then it is okay, though I'd advise you to be careful as it can put off some readers if not done well.

There are also paragraphs where the author doesn't make use of the proper punctuation. I had to retract several times in order to get the scene.

Other than that, the story is well done. As I had mentioned earlier, I love the plot, and I wish to see how far it goes.

Wonderful Story

If you enjoy reading historical novels, you will certainly find this one interesting. The plot is beautiful and well thought out. There are just a few grammatical mistakes but asides that, the story is well written.

I enjoyed this

I love the plot of this novel. It reads like all those adventurous animations I always watch. The author's writing style is very descriptive, and as it is well written it pulls you into the story, making the image vivid.

If you enjoy high fantasy and adventure, I would definitely recommend this. It is a unique story; different from most, yet the plot line is compelling enough for me to continue reading it.

I look forward to your next update!

Very Interesting

This book kept me hooked right from the beginning! It very unique. The world building makes me want to read on. I love the author's descriptive style of writing. It paints a perfect image of the setting of the story. The characters are also very interesting, each having a special trait of their own.

Things that I think should be worked on (though they do not affect the story) are;
1. The switching of scenes. It can be a bit confusing at times.
2. Adding new characters without introducing them. There are several instances where a new character is added in a scene and I was left confused about where they came from.
3. Head hopping. It isn't much, but it can cause a whiplash for the reader.

Overall, this book is very interesting. Though I am yet to finish it, (and I definitely will,) I will recommend this to people who love Greek mythology, fantasy and magic. It is beautifully written. Well done!

Nice Read

So far, the story is a very interesting one. If you enjoy reading stories about magic and witches, you would definitely enjoy this.

There are some scenes though, that are too fast paced. The characters are in one place and suddenly appear in another. It doesn't affect the story line, but it does confuse me a bit when I'm reading.

Apart from that, it is totally okay. Well done!

Beautiful! A well written fairytale!

This book is wonderfully written! The language is so dreamy, perfectly fitting the theme of the book. I especially like how it is a light novel, something to read when you want to enjoy a cozy evening.

There were some parts though were scenes were changed abruptly, but it's not too noticeable.

Other than that, this book is very lovely. Well done!

Well-written, Suspenseful story!

For someone who isn't particularly a fan of Sci-fi and the dystopian genre, this book just might make me rethink my choice. I totally enjoy the plot, most especially the suspense. I love your descriptions, how you make this world seem real.

And the main character! I love her drive to protect herself and her child and how she is willing to do anything to achieve that!

This is wonderfully written! Well done!

Alazne

Oh my! Now this really is interesting! I'm already loving it and can't wait for you to update! Please do, the suspense really is thrilling! Very nice!

The Scarlet demon

I love the characters, the theme and plot. I love the way you mix history with modern days. I totally love the way you describe and put words into action. It makes it more comprehensive. I love the suspense and most especially the action. This is professionally written. Nicely done!

The Rotten

Although I'm not really a fan of Horror, but this book makes me intrigued and want to keep reading.

Her Throne

The Author has a great idea for a story, and I can't wait to see how it fully develops.

I'd like to give the author some advice though. For one, the author makes use of a lot of commas, even putting them in places where there are meant to be full stops. Secondly, the author needs to take notes of their spellings. There are times when they make use of phone-text shorthand, and it is a little off putting. Thirdly, the author needs to build the novel's world. There are lots of dialogues and less of world building. I want to understand the type of environment the characters live in so I can easily get their discussions. Fourth, the author tells instead of showing. Although this rule is not one that must be followed, as there are exceptional authors who forsake the rule of showing and not telling, I do believe it can only be done if you have an exceptional skill of narration. I usually try to avoid doing so in my writing, as I have been told it can easily bore the readers. Fifth, the use of small letters. There are several instances where the author makes use of small letters to start a paragraph. It can be off putting.

Overall, I believe that the author should properly go through this story and edit it well, taking their time. This story has an excellent plot and shouldn't be taken for granted.

Wonderful!

I so much love the plot of this story! The author has a way of holding the readers interests and by the end of every chapter I wish to know what happens next. The descriptions of this world are beautifully done, and I could imagine it easily.

I'd advise the author though, to break down her paragraphs. Quite a few of them are much too long, making it a tad bit hard for me to focus on it.

Other wise, the story is perfectly written! I'll recommend this to those who enjoy reading fantasy. You will definitely enjoy this.

The Burden of Us

This book is so good! I feel bad for Ella and Dean! The former just wants to be with the man she loves, and the latter is confused about the love for his ex, and the love for the former. I really hope they can achieve what they wish for by the end of the book.

The author's writing is precise and easy to understand. The plot is also very interesting and in love the mystery surrounding it. I recommend this to everyone.

Frost love

The story starts off with action, which is a very good way of holding the readers interests. I especially like the plot, and like as the central theme of this book was given in the first chapter.

The more I read though, the more the chapters became more of telling rather than showing. There is a particular chapter where the author just narrates everything. It will be better to describe it as you did in the first chapter, so we can flow with the story easily.

Overall, the book is very good! I'd encourage you to read this if you enjoy reading vampire books.

Fun read

I really enjoyed the fun and fluffy moments shared between the main leads. The author's writing style is simple and easy to understand, and there are very little grammatical mistakes. The beginning does feel slightly rushed though, but it doesn't spoil the plot.

Interesting plot

This novel seems very interesting. It hooked me from the beginning! If you enjoy reading spicy books, you will definitely enjoy reading this!

I love it!

The story is well written! It hooked me from the first chapter! I loved the funny discussion between Mikaela and Fred! The language is easy to understand and is also precise. The author does a good job of describing the scenes. I am really looking forward to the next update!

Wholesome!

This novel is so sweet! The plot is full of fluff, and some scenes had me kicking my feet. I must say that Luke's mother is a tad too overbearing, frustratingly so. The language is precise and easy to understand, and I was so lost in the book to take note of any grammatical mistakes. It is well written! Well done!

Great writing!

If you are a fan of slow burn romance, you will definitely enjoy this story! This is so good. I feel bad for the Female lead though. Her husband can be such a duche.

I loved it!

I totally enjoyed this book! The author did well to describe the actions scenes, as I imagined them perfectly! I also loved the conversations! Especially between Joseph and Derek. They are so funny!😂

There is only one thing I hope the author takes notice of, and that is head hopping. At times you move from one characters POV to another, and though it didn't stop me from understanding the plot, it can cause a whiplash for other readers. I am sincerely looking forward to your next chapter update!

Suspense

This was a shocking start! I only hope that she gets the revenge she deserves! The books starts off really nice. The descriptions were well written, pulling me into the story.

Really, I hope her vengeance is harsh and hard! I look forward to the next update!

Lovely

This story reads like poetry! It is beautifully written!

An interesting story

This is my first time reading a novel that is written like this, but I was able to follow the plot without any problem! And so far so good! It is an interesting read. I am looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Interesting plot

So far this story has kept me hooked! It is very interesting, and filled with adventures. For someone that isn't really into alien romance, I must say that this book is written well enough for me to keep reading it.

A good ending

This is the shortest story I have ever read on this app, and I quite enjoyed the plotline. I was afraid when I saw Ramon and Rebecca enjoying a relationship together, but was happy when he received his deserved end. It was okay, at least he got to see his grandchild. That was enough forgiveness from Rebecca.

Wonderful! Gripping! Well written!

This story is very interesting! Normally I love historical romances, so I might be a little biased, but this story is well executed it has become one of my favourite stories here! It doesn't follow the usual plot most historical novels seem to follow, but it doesn't make it less interesting. There is a lot of mystery, perverse acts and tells of magic. Again, it is everything I need in a novel!

The story is well written. The grammar flows easily, and I was to caught up in the storyline to take note of any grammatical errors. I am very much looking forward to your next update!

Cozy Mystery

This is a short story that I very much enjoyed reading. At first, it seemed a little too fast paced, but I later understood why as it is a novella.

The plot is very good, though I personally believe more work has to be done for the characters development. For example, when Jake fights with our female lead. The abrupt way he leaves and the action he takes before he does so, left me confused. It seemed much to extreme an action for a character that is introduced as the kindest and lovable person ever(according to our FL, that is.)

Overall, the story is very well done! And I enjoyed reading it till the end. I never expected the plot twist also! Will definitely check out your next work!

Interesting read...

Our main lead is an abused woman who longs to be free. First abused by her father, and then sold off to another man who continued from where her father stopped, she could only hope that at least she would be alive to see the next day. But in a slightly drunken haze, she decides to take a risk and jump out of the window. (Saying more would be a spoiler.)

My thoughts;

This book has potential. There is something that I'd advise you reduce though, and that is your description. You do not have to describe every action, every emotion or every environment or object. Doing so wears out the story, and makes it seem like it's lumped with unnecessary words. In things like this simplicity is the best. If you have described a character before, you do not need to do it again. Instead, make use of action words that would enable the readers to envision the scene you are creating and even then, only use it when necessary.

Asides that, the plot is very good. I look forward to seeing how the story goes.

I Love this!!!

I just might have found another book on this site to fall in love with! Perfectly written! Great Characters and an interesting plot! It is everything I want in a novel! I especially like how it's fast paced, going straight into the action with not too much detail!

If you enjoy billionaire romances, trust me, you would definitely enjoy this!

This is perfectly written. Well done!

So far so good

This story is nice! I love how you described your characters, and I can already make out their behaviours. The plot of this story is also very good. It's like a mix of fantasy and sci-fi(in my own words.) Well done! I'm looking forward to the next update!

Intense!

This is not the type of books I usually read, but this particular one has great potential. The main characters at the beginning really annoy me, because I feel like they can solve their problem easily by simply breaking up and never seeing each other again. But I want to believe that the author has other plans for them and and that is why they are still together.

The language is easy to read and understand, though there are areas where the descriptions are a tad too much, and certain words are being repeated in the same paragraph or sentence.

Overall it is a great read. Well done!

Good, promising start

I personally enjoy reading reincarnation stories, so I am excited to find that this is one. But there is little done to the main character's development, and I believe more work should be put into it.

I wish to understand why and how her past life caused the drastic change in her behaviour, and I also want to experience the feelings of regret she has for her past behaviour.

Some scenes need to be worked on too. At times the characters jump from one place to another, and it is a little hard trying to catch up.

Overall, this is a good read. I look forward to your next update!

Beautifully written

So far I am enjoying this book! It mixes fantasy and horror well, though the introduction to the horror aspect is very sudden. (I should have known, it was written in the blurb😅)

The language reads well, and it is very easy to understand. The chapters are a tad too long though, but it's nothing serious.

There are several scenes of head hopping. I do not know if that is your writing style, as it doesn't really affect the plot, but it does read weird to me.

In conclusion, the book is wonderful. I am enjoying the plot, the introduction of magic and the suspense you created around the Male lead. I can't wait for the next update!

Bond of the immortals

Once I saw 'inspired by noblesse' I just had to check it out and I was not disappointed. It needs a few work to be done on it but this is totally something I'm going to spend my time reading. Well done!

One letter, one number till the next meet

Lovely! The plot is lovely. Immediately I started reading, I fell in love with the characters. You do have a bit of a problem with punctuation marks and paragraphs but apart from that, the book is very nice. Well-done!

His demonic possession

Intriguing! Very intriguing. I love the drama and the characters and the plot. Its very nice. Nicely written!

The first her

I totally love this book! I recommend it for anyone who is into romance, humor and laughter. I have laughed my head off God knows how many times, and the suspense is killing. Really can't wait for the next chapter!

Ray of sunshine

This is pretty nice. I love the theme of the story. I also love the mild suspense I have noticed so far, especially about the FL past. I understand that you are not a native English speaker and that this is your first book. I have to say, you are doing pretty great for a first try. Just some minors changes here and there and voila! It's perfect. Nicely written!

Candy land

The beginning is nicely written and the suspense feels just like a cherry on top. For someone like me who doesn't read horror, this is definitely worth my time reading. I love the beginning and I can't wait to see how it works out. Well done.

Reincarnated

Its very intriguing and captivating. Beautifully written with a wonderful plot. Good work!

Another High school love story

The book is very intriguing. Keeps you wanting for more. Very nice.