The Fire Seal - Book 1
If you like stories about magic, this is the book you should read here on Inkitt. Not only by the theme of the book, but of how the story is built, and also the characters. Action, romance, teenage drama, mystery and of course fantasy.
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In this story you will follow Dialla, the main character, through her discovery about her mark and also about the world of magic. What I liked the most in this story is how the protagonist was built. Dialla isn't the typical protagonist who discovers her magic and suddenly she already becomes a unique sorceress, feared and indestructible. No, she is full of fears, insecurities, doubts, and is discovering and learning about this new world she didn't know, little by little. Dialla is a teenager who sometimes acts like a spoiled, petulant brat, but elsewhere she is a caring person who loves her family and friends. And she has that complicated love life of every teenager who is still discovering what she wants, and who she wants. She makes mistakes and achievements, and that's what makes her more real.
>> If you haven't read the story yet, don't read it from here. Spoiler alert <<
The story has a slow pace, which I personally like. But when I finished reading the whole book, I realized that most of the action scenes are at the beginning of the story or at the end. And believe me, when you spend some time reading about her lessons and what she's learning, it becomes rather boring. There are incredible parts of the book that could certainly be explored, so the action would be spread throughout all the story, and not reserved for only some parts.
Such as Seth's betrayal. It would be nice if we could see Seth from the time Dialla entered the school - and not as if he suddenly fell into the story - and also about their relationship - the lessons he gave her. Her father's interest in her, the sword that suddenly appeared, and her mother doesn't even say anything when Dialla questions about the present, and also Lance who has an interest in her, but only being mentioned in the story about three times before - all these facts could be more explored in the course of the story, connecting many points and bringing more emotion in the central part of the book. The action scenes that exist are fantastic, the way the writer described them, the feelings of Dialla, but if it were more extended and not reduced to a few chapters, it would make the book even more incredible.
I know this is only the first book (I don't know how many there will be), but I did miss the fire seal being the main focus of the book - after all this is the title of the book. The writer has a great main theme in her hands, but I felt that instead of writing more about how Dialla feels about being unique, or the seal's discoveries, the story was more focused on the romance. And from one point you really start to think more about the romance between Dialla and Dimitri than the whole world of magic itself and her unique and powerful seal. Like I said, probably all of this will be clearer in the other books, but I don't know. I think that when a person discovers that she may die, or that no one knows about her seal, she will become curious and begin to research about it. I didn't see Dialla doing this.
Another thing I remembered, the part of her being in a coma could be more explored. What she saw, what she lived, who she saw - this was a very important part of the story, and that was so much talked about previosly, but then when it happened, it soon ended and another drama was added.
I'm sure writing a book about magic must be very difficult, and believe me, you're going the right way, the way you describe the scenes, the spells. But a tip... be careful with some ideas because we can remember Harry Potter. I know it must be difficult, but it's something I have to warn you about (especially by reading the blurb of Book 2).
This is a excellent story, and you have a great talent - as I said, the construction of the character is fantastic, the description of the fights, the spells, and the main theme of the story is very good. Congratulations on the story, and keep writing! I'm anxious to know who Dialla will choose at the end (I hope it's Dimitri).