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Excellent first draft
Congratulations, you are a writer! Thank you for your bravery in sharing your words. You have a great story to tell. I only gave you low marks for technical skills. It is okay to violate a rule, now and then. But not all of then in a short piece. Please close quotes after opening them. You have a gift that will improve with practice. (Even diamonds need polish.) I am looking forward to reading more. Keep on writing!
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