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Strings of Fate

First, I want to say sorry for this long awaited review. I've just finally had a chance to finish the story.

Second, I've always been interested in this concept of being fated for someone. The amount of stories I've read and research I've done is unbelievable. But I believe that yours is the most interesting concept I've read in awhile.

Like I previously mentioned, I enjoyed the concept the concept and thought that the story started of really strong. Having your MC (sorry I'm really horrible with remembering characters names) find the old guy and their entire conversation had me pumped to read the rest to see how it'd turn out.

All of the characters are unique, realistic, and believeable. I loved them all and how different their relationships were to each other and how they changed over the course of the story. That being said, the one tiny little thing that bothered me a bit was that she had to be fated for the sister's fiancé.

Now don't get me wrong! I definitely preferred her and him over the fiancé and sister. Your MC and fiancé had way more believable chemistry. But I felt horrible for the sister (even if she was acting bratty at the end) because it felt like it could have all been avoided to begin with. But then we wouldn't have this story...so it didn't bother me too much since I'm guilty as well for using tropes similar to this all the time.

Overall, I really enjoyed this and can't wait to read your next story!

Tale of the Wanderer

I love the plot and characters! It's been years since I've been able to enjoy a medieval story like this! Great job :)

First Impressions

The summary got me hooked as soon as I read it. I really love the twins (I'm a huge fan of twins in stories along with sibling dynamics) and I believe that you pulled off these things beautifully. There were a few grammar/punctuation errors but nothing that really drew me out of the story.

I can't wait to continue reading this!

Very Good so far!

Vampires and Werewolves (along with dragons) have always been my favourites out of the fantasy element. To see how this author is weaving together a story that I can't get enough is amazing. Can't wait to read more!

Great Story

I'm a huge fan of the fantasy genre and I like to see how other people define magic in their own stories. I have to say that I am really enjoying reading your story. I love the little touches you've made to this genre that has made this story stand out. Alandra is a very relatable character and I just love her overall.

At times, I did find it touch and go for my interest, but those were very few that I was able to brush them aside. And I have to say that I'm glad I did because this is a fantastic story and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Runaway Alpha

First of all the summary is very engaging. Second I love reading werewolf stuff so this is right up my alley! The story has a great start, the characters caught my interest, and I'm looking forward to reading the rest!

Great work

Liking it so far

I'll say off the bad that I'm not a huge fan of superheroes or superhero stories in general. But I gotta say that there are a few that manage to pull me in and care about the characters. And that's something you managed to do so kudos on you for that!

So, I like the overall plot of this story. It's actually very simple and something most (from what I've read/seen) superhero material does. You have an interesting villain in Doctor X and you have interesting superheros (so far) that are different than most.

David - is from a different universe. Reminds me of Thor in a way, but I enjoy his humour. The only thing I wish is that we could have a bit more background on him and his original universe and what exactly happened to have him in ours.

Leah - reminds me a lot of Twilight. I'm assuming that you were inspired by the novels for the background and I do love me some werewolves. I like the twist you put on how she transforms. But one thing, does she need the full moon to be able to change or can she do it at will? That's something that confused me when reading her story.

One thing I'll admit to not being fond of is the villains of the hero's personal arcs. To me, they just don't seem like villains, but very horrible people (and disgusting) people.

I will say that I wish you'd expand on the character's history since they really are diverse people and cultures. I also want to know a lot more about Doctor X, and if we do, then I hope you explain how he became the way he is. Or what his reason for targeting Earth is.

Overall, I'm enjoying this story and can't wait to meet the next superhero in this saga! Good work :)

Good Attempt for first book!

First, I'd like to say that your story has excellent ideas to work on, but sometimes the execution of those ideas seem toxic in a way to me. I'd suggest writing out an outline (even if it is just a basic outline!) to work off of at first.

Second, I can't imagine how hard writing English must be for the first time since I've always written English. That being said I do use an app called Grammarly since I absolutely suck at grammar and things like that. It wouldn't hurt to check out.

Third, I love the characters so far. I love parts of their journeys, some parts can be thought out a bit more, but I love their interactions as well. Somethings could be left in suspense and you could probably do with showing more than telling. (I have trouble with this part too - it can get quite frustrating!)

I am eager to see you evolve and become a hell of a writer! Keep the good work going! I can't wait to see how the two main characters grow even more.

Very Interesting!

First, let me say that Wynonna is very relatable to me on the customer service part since sometimes I really wish I can say some stuff to the rudest of rude customers. Second, I love the concept that you're going for :D

The only small complaint I have is that it sometimes seems to drag, but that's very few and far between that I can shove it away. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Interest Caught

Just started reading this story lately. So far, I love how the author established the mood and characters. The first chapter had my interest and I'm excited to see where this story goes! The only thing that sometimes takes me out is the author's spelling and grammar in a couple of places. But that's easy to let slide to enjoy the story overall.

Good Start

The start of this story is good and interesting. The characters are relatable and it seems like the story is going to be a fun one. Can't wait for the next update.

Amazing!

I just binge-read your story within two days. I haven't been that hooked on any story, published or not, in a long, long time! The issues you tackled along with the characters made for a great read. The plot kept me guessing twist after twist and I loved every single minute of it!

We Are What Remain

I like the story except that it seems to have ended on a cliffhanger of sorts. The writer's style keeps it easy to read and kept my interest all the way. I noticed a few grammar errors, but they didn't really hinder the story at all. I loved the characters - especially the sibling's relationship with each other...I am a sucker for that kind of stuff. The only thing that I had trouble with was that it seemed to drift off in a different direction at times. But considering everything overall, I really enjoyed reading this book especially since Halloween is coming up next month.