O.G. Carrel

BLACK FOREST BOY /// If the world chews you out, create your own!

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I don't care about LGBTQ....however

The book is really well written!

And don't get me wrong, I'm not against it. EVERY sentient being should be free to live its life however it sees fit.
If you belong to one of these groups mentioned in the title, then you will certainly enjoy the book.

Now to the to the meaty stuff.
BE WARNED, THERE WILL BE ONE SPOILER USED AS AN EXAMPLE.

To display how well written this is I'd like to take Tobias' first interaction with the swimming team captain as an example. The mix of shock and embarassment upon realizing who he is talking to, I felt that on my face. I'm certain everyone knows the feeling.

That to me is a very good sign for a book. As the author has the skill to deliver these emotions to the reader. Regardless of the characters sexuality and how I had to block my brain from visualizing some things! 😜

Keep going, I'm sure you'll do well in the future!

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Lovely read.

Wanted to read it all, but only made it halfway through until I couldn't hold back anymore.

I really like the story so far. The POV perspective is something I thought I should use in mine as well. It's great and your execution is marvelous! Sometimes, I'm doing something downstairs and just start to think, "Mmh, what will...what if...then?" So to say your story captured my imagination should be most accurate.

I really don't like the headmistress though. I want Kasdeya to tell her to shove her punishment, else she starts to think of some for when she will rule. Therefore, I suppose, Charon is a well-written character. :D

I don't feel adequate enough to point out anything in your writing skills. Not that I noticed anything so far. I can only read on and learn, and so I will, meanwhile already flirting with Hellfire.

Also, are you planning a paperback release? I want it, and I think it'll fit in well on the shelf next to my little wine collection.

Best regards,
O

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Bestseller incoming!

I got hooked on the story pretty fast.
The writing style is awesome. Even more so, if you take into account its still unedited.

When I read that there is going to be a hunt, I felt a sense of excitement, but also worry. And that, before I got to the part where Yuri, to me at least, felt the same.

Nice work and keep going, I can't wait to read more!
Really love how your sentences flow.

Best regards,
O

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