Oliver Lea

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Extremely accomplished for a young author

The quality of this novel is good by any standard, but when you consider the age of the author it's really quite breathtaking. I enjoyed the book very much. The style is clean and clear, the descriptions are vivid and tasteful, and the plot is polished and well thought out. Really impressed.

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Laborious detail

I picked this story because at the time it was in the Thriller top 20 on Inkitt. It was very difficult to read. The entire first chapter is spent mostly describing (in laborious detail) Nadine choosing her outfit and getting the tube to a club. Almost 800 words could have been condensed to "I tentatively selected a figure-hugging red dress and took the tube to Embankment". Other than that, basically nothing happens in that entire two paragraphs. The pattern of unnecessary detail and lack of substance continues and peaks in chapter 13, when the author literally copies and pastes the Google entries for three drugs, including phonetic spellings! The characters don't sound like real people. The punctuation and writing style is very underdeveloped. The whole story feels like it was written by a young, inexperienced author. She may well go on to hone her craft and do great things. But there are experienced, talented authors here on Inkitt and this novel falls well short of the standard.

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A thoughtful parable

You can tell there's a depth of thought and feeling behind the story. The fact that it comes through despite the difficulties in language and writing style is impressive. It reads more like an attempt at poetry, in the sense that for a 'story' it tries to get you to shoulder a huge weight of feeling much too quickly. I also suspect there is a cultural element which some readers may struggle to identify with in the absence of more context.

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Rich and character-driven

What I enjoyed about "The Mad Daughter" above all else were the characters. They are all spirited, original and realistic. There wasn't anything 'cookie-cutter' about any of them. My favorites were actually Ehren and Posy. The interaction between them was a delight to read, being everything from antagonistic to tender. The characters, in fact, were enough to keep me reading even though I felt it took a little while to establish what the story was 'about' - that is to say, who is Briar, what does she want, what is stopping her from getting it, etc. But once this was in place, the plot flowed brilliantly. It was a pleasure to read and I hope it does really well in the contest.

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Kinda juvenile

I started reading this because it was in the number 1 slot in the 'Thriller' category. I didn't make it past the first chapter. It was off to a bad start with a professor yelling "Congratulations you are all officially Vets" (has the professor managed to find them all jobs? I'm assuming we mean veterinary practitioners here and not veterans?) followed by a baffling claim that the main character has endured 7 years of 'law school' to become a vet. The writing is lifeless and juvenile. As I've said of other books on Inkitt, if this is a first attempt at a novel by a teenage writer, then it's not bad at all. But it's an emergent skill and has a long way to go. There's a serious lack of commas, which makes it pretty arduous to read. If a high school student had shown me this and asked me what I think, I'd have said "Good job" and made some suggestions for improvement. But here on Inkitt, it's going head to head with some very experienced writers, so I have to be kinda brutal. To the author; don't take this to heart (you'll need a thick skin if you want to go into publishing). Keep working on your writing and I'm sure you'll do great things one day. This is more a criticism of Inkitt's ranking system than anything else.

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A.N.Other teenage roleplay

I don't like to be mean, but Inkitt is mostly awash with teenage writers writing teenage protagonists who are idealised versions of themselves to play out a puppy dog romance fantasy. This is just another example. It literally has a spelling mistake in the title.

As a serious reader who's here on Inkitt to read quality emerging novels, I'm afraid "The Vampiers Pet" (sic) is part of the reason wading through the chaff on Inkitt to find something decent to read it such an exhausting task. In this way this is not so much a criticism of the novel as Inkitt's design of just dumping everything together in the same pool and making it impossible to identify the different writing levels.

Don't get me wrong, writing anything novel-length takes admirable effort and dedication. I've no doubt the author will develop her writing skills and quite possibly go on to do great things. I would encourage her to continue. For a first attempt at a novel by a school or college student, it isn't bad at all. But I didn't come to Inkitt to read high-school girl's dreams. That's what Wattpad is for,

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