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The feeling in the beginning of the story was nice. It felt old, experienced, and a little dark. I liked the fate of the characters, but there was something that prevented me from fully enjoying the story.
I had issue with the narrator's voice and especially the character Victoria. Both seemed childish at times. For a story that talks about a successful world after many failures, I was expecting the narrator to have a more mature tone, maybe even tired or resigned. I don't know if it was your intention, but sometimes I felt like the narrator's voice belonged to someone I could chat with over lunch. And Victoria didn't seem like the cold, calculating conqueror who clawed her way to the top. Her actions showed someone who's spoiled, easily angered, and easily defeated. This sounds like a woman who inherited power, not a woman who skillfully fought for it.
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