Rad

You cooked Will

So far (only judging from the first chapter) this is really good, I really liked the way you wrote every scene and the writing itself is very clear imo Only critique I have are for some sentences (mostly descriptive ones) to use more accurate wording/words Overall for a first chapter it's really good and sets up an overarching plot with a really intriguing background that makes me wanna read more ngl 10/10