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A amazing start

The writing style is very unique and the world-building is interesting and well done. Overall, I enjoyed reading the story, however, it was little slow to start. A lot of unfamiliar terms were introduced in the beginning which made things a bit frustrating. The story is really engaging thus far with the description of the alien landscape very vivid. The story is tagged horror which, unfortunately, by the end of the tenth chapter hasn't yet come through.

Cracking start

OMG! What an absolutely cracking start to a story! I'm definitely going to wait for updates on this one. Just one thing to look out for - the line breaks are in weird spots, mid-sentence which makes it very hard to read. If you can clean it up before publishing, that will be great. Overall, an amazing start and look forward to seeing how the plot unfolds.

Nice going!

The story has started off really well. I’d like to know what happens next. One thing you should remember is to watch the tenses. You tend to flit between past and present. Other than that and a bit of grammar, I will wait for the next update!

A good start

The first chapter is really great, and the dynamic narration continues through into the following chapters, with the parallel stories of Celeste and Elliot. There are some grammar / punctuation errors...which can be fixed easily when you go back to the story to edit.

love this!

I am loving how this story has started out! I agree with one of the other reviewers though....that you could make a lot more out of introducing all the fantastical creatures. But overall, a great story!

Oh wow!

Oh wow! This is such an exciting read! I actually finished reading it in a day and a half and that’s a record for me for a story of this length.
This is not a genre i usually read, so I went in a little bit skeptically, but I’m glad I took a chance.
This seriously has the potential to be something big with a professional editor! I do hope you get to work with one and can polish it so it’s the best version of itself. Thank you for sharing!

OMG

OMG! What a cracking start! I was actually holding my breath as the scene unfolded and can’t wait to find out what happens next!

An awesome read!

This is an awesome read, a refreshingly different story which in thoroughly enjoyed reading.
The loved the fact that the chapters actually have titles!
I’d certainly look forward to reading more from this author.

Congratulations!

Congratulations on winning second place in the Coalition awards! This story was an amazing read. The action was vivid and fast-paced, the characters engaging and the overall plot very interesting.

Congratulations!

Congratulations on winning first place in the Coalition Awards! I don't normally read vampire stories, but this one was certainly nothing like what I had expected. The characters and plot are intriguing and keep the reader engaged.

Nice read

This was a quick, short read which i really enjoyed. The plot is not too complicated, and is pretty much on ‘trope’...but hey...tropes are tropes for a reason, right? Thanks for a nice read, author😊

Building up to be something good

The writing is clean, free of grammatical errors, and enjoyable. The story starts out very well. The story is tagged adventure/romance and both have come through by the tenth chapter. However, the stakes aren't yet clear. The characters are relatable, enjoyable and believable! I wonder where the plot will go from here.

A well developed plot

This is an intricate, well-developed plot where there's a lot happening and certainly not in a bad way. The grammar and jumbled tenses are a little bit off-putting, but this is a vampire story with a difference which is worth reading.

A refreshing read

This is such a refreshing little read. Very well written, with real, well-developed characters and an amazing way with words. It was awesome!

Interesting start

This is an interesting start to a story. It's refreshing to read a werewolf story that is not all about the alpha wolves. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next with Cora and Finn! 💕 💕

Interesting plot

The plot is interesting and coming along really nicely. As most of the reviewers have already mentioned, it does a bit of editing, but the author has a unique voice, which is enjoyable to read. I look forward to seeing how everything unfolds.

Well developed plot

At the cost of repeating what almost everyone before me has said, your plot is really interesting but needs quite a bit of editing in terms of grammar and punctuation. But hey, we have to start somewhere, right? The rest is a matter of practice and study! Good luck :-)

Oh, WOW!!

This is one the few stories here with very, very few grammar errors. That in & of itself is a pleasure to read. Add to that, the writing style is enjoyable. The plot hasn’t yet progressed far enough to comment phone, the story has me hooked in. I look forward to reading more.

Well developed plot

I've enjoyed reading this story so far. As quite a few readers have pointed out, if you concentrate more on showing us, rather than telling and a few grammar mistakes that've creeped in, it'll be an even more enjoyable read. I look forward to reading how it progresses.

Quick paced.

This is not a genre I usually. But this story is fast paced. The chapters are way short, but it works for this story. Quick and punchy - these two words pretty much describe everything in this book, from the characters to the chapter length to the writing style. I hope you finish the story!

Amazingly well written

I have fallen in love with this story. The characters are incredibly engaging and real. You have gotten in each one's head and drawn them out so well! I cannot wait to see where this goes.
I should have given 4 stars for grammar and punctuation, as there are some issues, especially early on in the story...but I loved it too much to focus on that. It will be great if you could fix those though.

I am hooked!

I am really liking how this story is turning out. There is really very little to complain about :-)! But, if I were to pick one thing, it would be that the first few chapters seem to progress a tab too slow. However, because of the writing style, one is still inclined to keep reading!