SelinaRS

Love your writing style!

I’m not exaggerating or anything – but I love your writing style! The descriptions are not overly dragged out, but not too little either. The way you worded the sentences… A perfect combination of showing and telling too. And although this isn’t the type of story I usually read, it’s one of those hidden gems. Keep up the good work!

Great Read!

So far it’s a fantastic read.

The pacing is nicely done and the characters are pretty intriguing. However, I find a few paragraphs a bit bland — but nothing to fret over. Also, just a quick rundown on the editing will work wonders. Other than those minor issues, I believe this story might have a promising future.

Great Read!

Personally, it's a great read. The characters are relatable, and the story itself does carry an important message and the struggles lgbtq+ individuals face. However, I'm not going to get too much into the story itself. Instead, let's focus on how it's delivered.

It would be nice to see better sentence structure. There were a couple of noticeable grammar issues - which a quick fix would help. A bit more descriptions would also be great between dialogues, and maybe try to get into the character's head more often. Other than that, I think you have a great story. Keep going!

Great Read!

I enjoyed it quite a lot... There could be some fixes with grammar issues, and although there were some confusing parts (too many characters being introduced in a short span - which could be just my personal preference) I think a quick read-over in the future could fix any and everything. All in all... Keep going!

Captivating!

Okay, I should’ve read the first part before I jumped to this because I’m really enjoying Tilly’s dilemma about her pregnancy. It gives a sense of reality, and the troubles one faces in a situation like this.

I really feel for the fml, and after reading the first few chapters, I’m going to read the first book before I get back to this.

Awesome writing, too!

Fun Read

I like the concept. It's a fun read, lighthearted - nothing too Debby-downer. However, the fml is a pick-me, and there are a couple of instances where past & present tense are mixed up.

Enjoyable!

I honestly enjoyed it more than I thought I would. Overall, I just wished there were more descriptions.

Engaging

The first chapter was captivating. However, I would like to see more emotions portrayed. Overall, it's a fun little read.