Kraehe

Awesome!

I love the plot of this story so far! The characters that have been introduced so far are intriguing and have interesting dynamics. Alice's internal comments add to the story and let the reader know directly how she reacts to or feels about different situations. The only thing I noticed that could possibly be worked on would be punctual or grammar related mistakes. Try not to have too many run on sentences or get too carried away in descriptions, sometimes simple is better. It's also helpful to double check spelling and spacing errors. But overall, amazing story, keep up the great work!

Mysterious

This is amazing! I love the way that we're immediately thrown into it, with Ambrose and Wren digging up Cassiel's grave. The story hooks the reader and leaves you on edge, wondering what will come next. Keep up the great work, I can't wait to hopefully see your other work or see this story continued!