Andrealove20

These Glass Walls

I'm in love with this story. It's so interesting and so well presented. The characters are described really well in a way that it doesn't ruin the story. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Well done.

Bereft

I love this story! Looking forward to seeing how this story will develop. The characters are well presented and so relatable. I love the main character, some of the characters are so relatable which is great. I like your style of writing. Keep up the good job!

Magic School

This story is really interesting and I would like to see where it goes. But I suggest that you don't make each chapter on long paragraph because it will make it a bit boring to keep on reading it. Every time a character speaks try to make it a separate paragraph so that it's easier to read it and tell when someone is speaking. I would say that you're moving too fast with the story. The first chapter has a lot of information and the characters aren't introduced properly. Like in the first chapter you could start off with just the relationship and feelings in the family and then end it with explaining about her magic powers, and then in the second chapter, you could talk about the school.
But I think it has a really good plot. So keep it up.

My Innocent Assitant

The first two chapters were really great. I love the theme and how you did the story from a male's point of view. There are some few grammar and spelling mistakes. Also, try to make the paragraphs a bit shorter so that the reader can catch up with the story later.
I really like this story and I hope to see more.
Well done author!

400 Days in the Apocalypse

It has a lot of potential. Definitely worth reading. One thing is that you could make your paragraphs a bit shorter so that it's not all bunched up into one. Try to keep it 4-6 lines at least. Otherwise well done.

When the moon meets the sun

The questions give a little bit of insight as to what the story is going to be about. I would suggest not to put so many questions, it could make the reader get bored of it. But otherwise, can't wait to read about it.

Our Cycle

The descriptions are impeccable, it really creates a beautiful image in the head and makes it sound like a magical place. I personally don't like fantasy but this one is worth the read.
Well done!

Disguise

The plot is so intense and the description is so vivid. That is an amazing story. One thing that you could improve is the grammar. Some words need to be changed so that the sentences make sense. Also, the first chapter was a bit confusing with how many characters were introduced, I feel like I as a reader didn't get to know each character properly except the narrator and its gang. But overall the story is really good.
Keep it up, author!

Lilac Ascendant

The story is beautifully written. The description is amazing you can imagine it in your head. The first chapter was so captivating and it just kept me going. The characters are well presented. Keep up the good work. Well done author.

Blinding Light

The beginning of the story was just amazing, I was intrigued from the first line. The description is very vivid and I can imagine it in my head. It is obvious that the character is having a mental struggle on the first chapter. This story is really good keep up the good work.