snowfly

complexity

Hello, I am really liking your story so far, and your fluid way of writing. The characters are quite intense and interesting .It's difficult to guess what way they will go, keeping us guessing. I will review again further into the story. Keep writing. Well done.

forget me not

Love it already. A dark retake of Alice.Not my usual type of read, I found it intriguing and interesting. It has made me think how fairy and fantasy stories could come so close to being horror stories.Your story flows quickly keeping the reader glued., anticipating the outcome. Well done

Thirty nine minutes

@cat . I am really enjoying your story so far. An extremely interesting original story . Waiting for the rest... keep going,

really intrigued to know Craig's story. Great read.

Well done.
I think you would like my book on Amazon 'The Adventures in the Rainbow Forest', I would appreciate it if you took a peek look at it. Thank you. Don't make us wait too long for the rest of the story.
Another interesting chapter, keep going we want more. Love the story, the plot and the style.so original and unique.You can do anything you like with this story, it has potential . Thank you.

partners in arson

Hello, I love the way you capture interest from the start and make me want to read on. I gave you a 4 stars for grammar because nobody gets it perfectly right (including me) and if there are any mistakes I missed them. :) Back to the book.
Loving it so far, you are managing to keep the mystery ongoing..Looking forward to the rest.
I am still feeling a bad outcome to the story, something nasty lurking around the corner, Hiding the truth to why this child is not with her parents.Keep writing.
Another delightful chapter.... keep going it is intriguing. There are a few grammatical errors ,
you can do a quick edit for that. It is time to give us more now.We are all anxiously waiting :).
I just added a new story, maybe you could take a peek , please. Title : The

Upside of Parkinson's.

devil's heartless beauty

Yes, enjoying the story so far.It sounds as though it will be interesting.You need to brush up your English a little bit, it would help the story immensely.. Well done for the effort,keep studying you will improve with time, I can imagine your story is excellent in your native language.Your English is really very good, just needs a bit of polish.Looking forward to the next chapter.
When you say 'cabin do you mean office.

momma's lil' angel

hi. i am not into horror but I will try to be unbiased. Original as a story and plot.Well written. Even if I don't like horror I was glued to keep reading until I was too spooked out to carry on...sorry, my problem not yours. Well done. am sure horror lovers will rate it highly, it deserves it.

Secret Pleasure

The plot is good and fast moving which keeps the reader's interest.I like the story so far. Unfortunately it is spoilt by the lack of knowledge of the English language. I am sure it is great in your own language. You should get help with your translating. Don't worry , you will get there. Keep studying you will soon be perfect, then the language won't disturb the story. Get someone to show you your mistakes. On the whole it is quite good so you will soon learn.Keep writing. Looking forward to the next chapter.

the six guardians

I only had a few minutes to spare but I got hooked straight away, I am looking forward to reading it all.I have dedicated this evening to do just that.I will turn off the phone and the tv and have a full immersion of fantasy that I am sure I will get from your story.Well done.
As I said earlier , your story takes me back to when I played the video games , Zelda and Final fantasy with my son (he is 37 now and still playing).Your story could well be turned into a video game, each chapter a different level with a different task to accomplish.
I know that your story is aimed at a younger audience but I really enjoyed it, you are only as old as you feel, I could picture the scenes in my mind as I read and that is what fantasy should do. If you have checked out my story on Amazon you will see I have plenty of fantasy myself, even at my age. So keep up the good work, the more you write the better you will become.
Altogether an easy read, fast moving it kept my attention ( which is hard with Parkinson's ) and made me want to keep reading.Well done and good luck. Pauline

Imperfectly Beautiful

Loving the story so far, witty and amusing the encounter with James. Hating the mother for not loving her child as she should. English is not your language so your mistakes are forgiven , don't worry you will learn. Looking forward to the rest, well done.The story is unfolding really well.You still have quite a few mistakes with the English. You should get somebody to edit it for you .It is a shame because it is spoiling your perfectly good story.Ask Inkitt, maybe they can help you they helped me with IT problems.Keep going , it is a great story so far and I want to read more. Well done.