What is your opinion?
Intriguing story
"It can be rather too easy to write a story about a fantasy place you never visited. However, you did a good job with Lagos, a real place hardly anyone visits as a travel destination, and a very good job on the character of your scryer mage, Jezebel. Even the ritual magic was well done. It takes more than Google research to do that. The plot had just the right twist. It was great. Evading the trap of the Underworld and returning, the quintessential wizard's journey, was perfect. The text needs a bit of de-linting. You changed tenses at least once and had a few misspellings. When you are working spells, misspellings can be a bitch. You left yourself an opening for the follow-on story. I'll read it!"
Good story
"It's interesting but the story could be fleshed out a lot more. Gore is heavily relied on in the underworld "
