Let the Music Play

"The two Chapters were both intriguingly written. The author has a good writing style and a good command of grammar in general, but needs to watch punctuation. There were too many annoying errors in punctuation that could have stopped me from reading it altogether, but I decided to ignore them and persevere through to the end. The sex aspect of the story was sudden, and too brutal for my taste, as I like a gentle love story even if it is blistering, sexually, but that did not matter so much. The basic story, (as little as there was of it), flowed, and was entertaining.. Please correct the punctuation errors. I pointed out in 'feedback' what the first ones were, but I got fed up of dealing with them after about the first ten."