CandyStripers of Light Rain Curvingly
Strips of light ran curvingly from waists to ankles, a bunch of lines drawing the whole shape of their long, slim bodies in the darkness, She dragged us through the door past thorny briar patches. Something dropped out of her bag and clanged on the floor making bristling clangs that must have ran through the halls. Now we had to contemplate someone coming in. The valumptious girl then realized the door wasnt <locked> and jumped for the it...
As it opened in a dark boot was the first thing the short girl saw step through the opening and the strips of light slowly followed the curves of her calves above the top of the boot to a dark <patterned> stockings in the shape of pyramids. We looked at each other not sure how to react but she didnt seem embarrassed. there was something else in her eyes that we couldnt quite ~touch~ our fingers to.
It was time to take some air so they looked around to check their options. They could hear the banshees and sirens wailing in the distance, echoing off the mountains that could just be seen by the full moon light.
Then...
The balance in your writing—between dialogue, description, and action—is top-tier. It already reads like a storyboard. I can translate that energy into visuals that keep readers engaged from frame to frame.