What is your opinion?
Keep it up!
"Cool story! You definitely have talent with creating interest quickly. But if I say only good things then you will have no room to grow, right? You may consider running through a Grammer program to give you an idea of what sort of Grammer to work on (I struggle with Grammer as well, so I feel ya) I also found some of the paragraphs a bit confusing, as you just said "he" and didn't say who"he"was. I could assume it was the main character but I think it's good practice to make it more clear. Great story, looking forward to reading more. If you're interested in fantasy check out my "A Necromancers Dream". If you do I hope it gives you some inspiration, and let me know what you thought. https://www.inkitt.com/stories/1046587"
Review
"I am curious to know what happens to Ben over the course of the next chapters, the author succeeded in getting me interested in the plot. However, the story sounds more like a rushed description than a story. Detailing the surroundings and the characters might improve the story-telling aspect. "
