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"Will read part two then review "
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The vampire ambassador
"Another excellent book by an amazing author. Thanks Author! Hope you finish book 3 quickly. "
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Lovely piece 😌
"I enjoyed reading this book!🥳 The plots, twists, and characters used made everything intriguing 🤩"
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The Vampire Ambassador
"Love this sequel just like the first one!"
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"Love this book just like the last"
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To the author
"Been waiting anxiously for more chapters and decided to read all at once nt bit by bit. Great decision i made. Thanks for the updates. Love this story "
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A vampire...-review
"While I haven't read the first book I still enjoyed this story very much. One quickly grasps what is happening as the author provides enough information skillfully through the dialogues and inner voice of the MC. Melody is a delightful character. I enjoyed her inner voice and thoughts, whether she was happy, angry or shocked (loved her reaction when she came to Erik's room and i chuckled at several of her musings ). At times perhaps the pace falls a bit slow (some dialogues are a bit stretched and also some descriptions of MC's actions could be shortened).I kept thinking if perhaps this book could work better if narrated in third person - from Melody's point of view. This is because there's quite some of I did this ...i did that..., which in first person can sound a bit forced. At the same time would be a shame to omit those descriptions.... In overall, it's a well written tale, with interesting characters and many original elements. It's engaging, and you do want to see what's going to happen next. "
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Nikki's Review
"I have too many pages up posted on wrong book sorry. This is in line though. Im at work getting my reading in."
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The Vampire Ambassador
"I think in general, the plot is decent. I'm looking for something that separates it from other stories of this genre though because it follows very popular/somewhat overused tropes. In that way, I could easily predict everything, and you want to keep your readers guessing. At the time of this review, though, there are only 12 chapters, so maybe something new will be thrown in there later to set it apart. I also think the character's emotions are a little unrealistic. They get over/get angry about things like... Super easily and their emotions flip flop within a sentence. Like, if I'm soulmates with someone, and suddenly I disappear and they just kinda... Take my evil uncle's word for it ??? Like weird drink potion involved or not, I'd be pretty fucking pissed and probably wouldn't get over it so quickly. But also, on the other hand for him, if he genuinely believed this was the truth, I'm not sure he'd change his opinion so quickly. It might take more convincing for him if he really felt betrayed by her. So, in that way, I think some of the emotional part of the story moves too fast. They fall in and out of love like it's going out of style. The writing style I also think would benefit from showing rather than telling. There is also a lack of sentence structure variety that can give a choppy feel to the narrative, so I think adding some more variation to that would be beneficial. Technically, I didn't notice many issues, just some with grammar. And, this is a nitpick, but if a new character is speaking, that should be a separate paragraph. So instead of it being: He says, 'I hate pickles." Which earns a giggle from her. 'That's so weird,' she replies It should be: He says, "I hate pickles." Which earns a giggle from her. "That's so weird," she replies. This is especially important for like larger bits of text/description between dialogue tags because you can lose track of who is speaking, especially if the second dialogue tag comes after the piece of dialogue. So separating those with a paragraph break will give an indication that someone new is talking automatically Overall, though, good job! I think you have the bones of a good story, but just work a little on plot/character development along with the showing vs telling and you'll be golden. Good luck :)"
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