What is your opinion?
Interesting First Chapter
"I just got finished reading the first chapter, and so far I'm intrigued by the story and Sher's character. She seems like she's going to have a nice sense of humor to her, and so far, very interesting and loves her job. I like that she's happy with her life. The author has a very casual writing style, which makes it an easy read for readers (this is a good thing). However, there were places where grammar and punctuation can be fixed. I know this is a draft though by the title, and so I think this is a great effort. I can't wait to see more of the story. :) **NOTES FOR THE AUTHOR IN THE COMMENTS."
Has potential
"This has a lot of potential to become something truly great! It just needs another glance over and a little polishing, but I think you are off to a great start! I can't wait to read more. Keep going!"
First Impression
"As there is only one chapter, I feel I can't give a well fleshed out review and this will be my first impressions. It's an early draft so punctuation errors are expected so I won't dwell on it. I suggest giving it a re-read whenever you can to make sure the sentences flow well. I'd say the story so far has a lot of telling rather than showing. I realised at the end I wasn't sure of the location of the character, how they looked or their name. For me it became hard to visualize the scenes. It's definitely too early to say anything about the plot but I'm hopeful for the story. For now just try to add a bit more descriptions (and not just physical descriptions, perhaps talk about how loud the music was in the club or what the birthday outfit looked like.) Other than that It's a good early draft and I'm interested in how the story will shape up :) *I'll come back and change my ratings once there is more things added so ignore the current ratings. *Also you might want to unbold the entire chapter!"
