What is your opinion?
Crystal High - absolutely amazing
"If you're into mythological fantasy 100/100 recommended!! "
Great so far
"This was definitely an interesting read and I am intrigued to no whats going to happen next. Some spelling and grammar are slightly off but that's understandable it happens. But overall a great read and can't wait for mor "
Don't remember
"I thought this was going to be a novel. I didn't usually read fantasy "
Crystal high
"I loved everything about d book "
Good start
"So far, this story is pretty good! There are some pitfalls like grammatical structure, but overall, the plot is really intriguing and the characters are all pretty decent."
Unlikable FMC and Trying Too Hard to Keep the Mystery
"The plot and the cover where the things that called my attention about this story. Unfortunately, maybe it appeals to others, but by chapter 7 I couldn't go on anymore, and the trigger was the "Don't concern yourself over this" sentences told by the principal. The story is trying TOO HARD to keep some mystery going on, to the point characters are looking very much not-smart (I avoid using other words because Inkitt's profanity control is picky to the point of triggering upon the opposite of kind). A good mystery is always good to keep the reader hooked, but it must deliver something, and being brushed aside time and time again gets too old too fast. Eventually I stopped caring about the mystery. The characters were ok. I have a soft spot for Isa and Reed, but I can't stand Brielle. She came out to me like a selfish, petty, constantly-complaining spoiled girl, not to mention she has no discernible skill and she's absolutely passive. The information gets delivered to her because she's around, not because she actually tries to find that information. Harry Potter sneaked into the Forbidden Section of the library to get the information he needed, and Brielle got all books and stuff just given to her. Isa managed to hack a security camera, but Brielle needed to find a tech kid, and she didn't even find him herself, Reed did it for her. She's so passive she didn't even do research on the school's program for the school she applied for, and which has archery and other combat arts in their curriculum. Then there is the grammar. The author is clearly not a native English speaker, the same as me, so I'm not going to be particularly picky, but there are way too many mistakes to ignore, such as "flatter" instead of "flutter". As a non-native speaker myself, I do research when I'm not sure whether a word is correct or how it is written. I don't mind the odd mistake, or the odd phrasing, but it got to the point some sentences didn't make sense, or were hard to understand. There are some good things in the story. The mystery itself, if it hadn't taken so long to deliver, could have been interesting and something worth to follow, but the unlikeable, passive Main Character, and the way the story tries too hard to ignore it or brush it aside so as not to "reveal it too soon", instead of planning accordingly, eventually made me lose interest. I do think the author has potential, because the reading itself was fluid enough. It was easy to read, it never really felt boring, and I could have been invested in the story fairly easily if the characters hadn't eventually put me off, so I think there is material there that, once honed, will give some really nice stories. However, it is a complex mystery and it needs to be thoroughly outlined before facing such a challenge. I would suggest more straightforward, simple stories to practice first, and then tackle more complex ones."
