What is your opinion?
Worth a read
"I was actually really pleased with how well this book was written. The descriptions make you feel like you are there in the story. Strong dialogue as well. Good character who seems well thought out. A good plot as well. Can't wait to see how it continues."
Compelling plot !! And engaging story
"So far there have been only five chapters, but I can say it was a good deal of time...the romance between Leo and Beth kept me on the edge all the time. Love the way the author describes a childhood love story and I will follow suit to know more... Good work author!!"
The Origin
"The characters in the story were well written! I was pulled into Leoandro’s life very easily and I enjoyed (maybe a little too much) of him honoring his wife. I love that kind of relationship where it felt realistic and not straight forward where boy meets girl and instantly fall in love. The end of the chapter made me want to know what happens next, especially about the pendant! The only critic I have was punctuation which is an easy fix in stories -I’m still fixing those in my stories so no judgment here. Overall, well done! I don’t usually read these types of novels but the plot and characters were extremely intriguing and different from other stories I read. "
A voyage.
"Since you posted in the review that you wanted a constructive review so here it is. Pronoun misuse in many sentences in the first chapter. Example: His father was a royal physician... Tenses misuse. There are some places where you use past tense and then there are places where you use present tense. Example: (he takes care of Ramya) This should have been (he took care of Ramya…) Punctuation. There are a few areas where the punctuation is missing and some places where it is not needed. So my suggestion is for you to run your chapter in the Grammarly app before uploading. I would suggest that you use the show but not tell technique. I will give you an example using your story here from chapter two. The slosh of the crystal blue water against the hardwood was a soothing sound to the ears, the salty breeze that blew brought a chill that indicated that a storm was on its way… Overall, the plotline is very beautiful, and if you can correct everything I think this novel will shine. Hope you rise higher in your writing career. 🥰"
