What is your opinion?
When An Angel's Love Descends
"I think that you have a very nice story coming together here. You have the meat and cheese put together, that being the dialog in conjunction with your storyline, which nine times out of ten makes the story. You pay extensively close attention to detail, especially when it comes to introducing the reader to King Elliot. The relationship between him and Archangel Michael is most interesting, so I am eager to see where this all goes. I look forward to reading the rest of what you have in store for your story. So far, great work :D"
Talented
"This has clearly been a thought out idea! There are no signs of rushing and it appears the author took their time with every sentence. Keep up the good work!"
When an Angel's Love Descends
"Firstly, you have captivating and beautiful writing style that expresses emotion so well. You have just a bit of poetry within the prose that never feels too flowery or dramatic. There are, however, a couple time within the story when you switch from past tense to present tense when you are describing King Elliot and later Michael. I'm not sure if this is intention, as a stylistic choice, but I do feel it's distracting and doesn't add anything to the writing. The story itself is interesting, I'm fascinated to see how Elliot will change over the course of the story to become what he does. The characters are just coming into focus in this first chapter, so I think they have the potential to be of incredible depth but I haven't seen much of that as of yet. I do have a general sense of their personalities however. Elliot's arc is going to be the focus of the story, at least from what I can tell, but don't forget Michael. Make sure he has a character arc of his own, something he learns, ways he changes. And this arc doesn't have to be positive. He can learn something untrue, he can change for worse. Otherwise, he will become stagnant and boring. Overall, a lot of potential lies within this story and I'm seeing some glimmers of greatness. Keep up the good work and be sure to fulfil that potential. "
Amazing
"Omg I can't wait for more when will more chapters be out "
