Cat Johanson

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So

I have to admit that this story is kind of rushed and everything is in long, strung together paragraphs, which takes away from what could be a good horror. If you had taken things more slowly and had better structure and grammar, this could be a really compelling story.
What I'm saying is that while the plot, characters, and general circumstances throughout this book are good, the way you went about writing it really wasn't.
You also had some technical errors in the plot that didn't make sense, like how Matt got out of the hospital after a few hours(in real life they would have kept him at least overnight) and you called paramedics "ambulance people".
I recommend getting an editor to fix your grammatical, pacing, and technical errors. If you did that, I think The Haunting Daunt would be a really good horror.

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Great historical Fantasy

I like the elements of history and mythology you incorporated into the story. Your descriptions are vibrant and expressive, and the world-building is fantastic. I was hooked from the start and can't wait to read more!

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So, Fragile Things

The overall plot/storyline isn't particularly original, but I genuinely enjoyed the story so far. I like the main character and her friends, and I think your dialogue is quite good. The grammar and punctuation are good, and the pace was about perfect. Good luck, and good job!

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Wow!

I really like the worldbuilding, with the different cities for different types of people. The plot feels a tiny bit rushed but holds up pretty well overall. I also really enjoy the descriptions, and as far as the English goes, it's really good for a non-native English speaker. The author is very talented, and I can't wait for more!

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Nice!

The grammar and descriptions are really good, especially for a non-native English speaker. I like the main character, and the plot is interesting.

The dialogue could use some improvement, but overall is solid.
Keep up the good work!

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Wow

I have to admit it took a couple of chapters to catch me, but once it did I was definitely invested. I love the main character, and you did a good job making the reader sympathise with her.
The format is a little messy and there are a few grammatical errors, but that's to be expected in a draft. Great work and good luck!

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Wowwwwww

Okay, so the story is a little slow, but that's something that I think a lot of people appreciate. The style in which you write is a little confusing, but if one takes the time to understand and explore it, the amount of emotion you convey is utterly amazing. I also quite like the characters and the way they relate to each other.
Your grammar and punctuation are excellent, and my only complaint is that the constant switching back and forth can be a little disconcerting, but it does help contributes to the depth of the story.
So while this book isn't exactly my type, I think objectively, it is something of a masterpiece. Good work, and good luck!

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Hmmmmmmmmmm

So, as far as your plot and characters, you did a great job creating a well-built and interesting world. My only complaint with the main character is that you could probably find a better way to convey her emotions, but overall she is pretty good. The grammar and spelling are pretty solid, but the dialogue is a bit strange. It's like you tried to mix more old fashioned and modern language, and it's kind of disconcerting. You could also use better descriptions, but I understand this is a draft, and I'm sure once you've polished it up it will be a lot cleaner. Good job and good luck!

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So, Wolfheart

As someone who isn't normally a fan of werewolves and such, I was a little hesitant. Your story, however, was a surprising breath of fresh air for the werewolf fandom. You managed to make an engaging and original storyline, with an interesting and likeable protagonist. The plot is engaging, and your description skills are magnificent.
I really enjoyed reading this story and look forward to continuing it. Great job, and good luck to you!

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