Passionate

"It's sad to say but I am totally engrossed with this intoxicating tale of Betty and Micheal. Built on a foundation as rocky as ever, it introduces wonderful characters whose tales intertwine, creating a complex story that draws in all types of readers. While the story plot is amazing, I would definitely like to point out a couple of little tidbits to improve on your writing that I personally think would elevate your story. One trick is to clearly write who was talking because sometimes it gets muddled up. And finally, try to separate your paragraphs to make reading easier. Otherwise terrific job."