What is your opinion?
Would lilke to read more
"Nice narrative style, strong character voice and interesting setting. I'd definitely read more. The opening was a good hook and the gradual unveiling of the scene and characters didn't feel at all rushed, nice pacing which is something I look for in particular."
Adrenaline rush
"Well done! I really enjoyed reading it because it has a nice flow and beautiful violence. One can't help feeling sorry for Dante and his victims. I love how you describe sounds and smells because it felt like I was observing on a close distance. May you get lots of love and many reads!"
Super cool!
"I absolutely love this author. As a reviewer, I think it's only fair to reveal that I'm entered in this contest, and I'm a professional editor. So I have my biases. But the author here has such a punchy style, so very little "to be" verbs dragging the story down. It was all punch. I'm extremely curious as to what it means to be initiated as a Shade. The dialogue is natural; the pacing is fast; the characterization is strong in that there is a certain feel that each individual has; the setting is scant, but in a story like this, that makes sense, considering much of the story was a Live or Memorex? feel; the plot is original and interesting. A person being initiated to his Shade. Sounds like a wedding to your dark side. So I absolutely loved this and will be excited to read more. The ONLY negative is the grammar and use; it needs somewhat heavily edited for grammar and use. Missing commas everywhere, words misused, etc. Other than that, lots of luck to the author!"
