Lots Of Potential!

"The main character, Kevin, is just starting high school and has fallen hopelessly in love with a girl who doesn't seem to even notice him. So he decides to pursue her in the hopes that she will finally notice him. However, when Kevin's family becomes unknowingly connected to a sudden murder of a scientist, Kevin's life gets a whole lot more complicated. The author easily maintains a feeling of unease and mystery throughout the story which helps to keep things interesting. There are several spelling, spacing and grammatical mistakes that slightly take away the readability of the story but this story has so much potential to be a great one. Some general editing and clarifications about the characters would really help to push this story to the next level. Overall, the author does a good job. Keep up the good work!"