What is your opinion?
Mafia VooDoo
"My first impression, great setting for a crime story. Louisiana is full of hit-men, fast girls, and plenty of places to dump a body. The errand that Bill sends Shawn on sets up a good story question and propels the story forward. Bill sending Jerome adds suspense and puts the lead in danger. The overall premise is good, mob heavies and black magic. I like it, good start. Shawn trying to get out of the mob and the mistrust is a good story question? Great start, I will come back and read further."
Wow
"I really enjoy this story so far, you do a good job of quickly endearing us to the MC. You writing throughout is very descriptive and flowing, though sometimes it can take a second read through of a line to figure out who is speaking. Occasionally there is a grammar mistake, but they are relatively small and easy to fix. I look forward to see how this goes!"
VooDoo
"Was a really great read. Wish there was more to this story. Only thing I would change would be to make the readers feels like they are in New Orleans. Make your characters sound like they are from Louisiana. Give a little more insight of what it really like here in NOLA. "
