What is your opinion?
Legal
"Ótima leitura, só os capítulos que se repetem muito, mais fora isso ,gostei bastante, bem o estilo de leitura que eu gosto "
J'adore
"C'est l'une de mes histoires préférée. Je l'avais déjà lu sur une autre application. Je recommande ++"
Freya
"J'aime les histoires de loups et vampires ça m'a vite donné l'envie de savoir la suite"
Discovering Freya
"This was a wonderful amazing story, I cant wait to read the next one. "
Discovering Freya
"I really enjoyed reading your book. I can't wait to read the next. "
Discovering Freya
"I found this book wonderful the only thing was the repeating of things Iunderstand it’s thru different eyes but I felt like I was reading the same chapter all over again The story is great I loved that it brings all species in and creates new ones as well Looking forward to the next book"
Discovering Freya
"What a great book I cannot wait to start reading book 2 "
Awesome
"Great story"
Discovering Freya
"I totally enjoyed the story. It was filled with emotion, suspense, excitement, humor, horror, love, everything you want in a storyline. Loved it and can’t wait to read the next book! Cindy "
The book is amazing
"I don't dislike anything. It is a really good book I will recommend it to everyone "
Compeling plot
"Plot development was amazing! Characters played out so well. Freya is such a strong woman. Looking forwaa to the sequal."
Good reading
"This book is very easy to read and keeps me interested so I have a hard time putting it down "
Good 👍
"It's so good it sounds just like another book i read. Exactly"
💜💜
"Enjoyed reading 💜 looking forward to reading more 💜"
Discovering Freya
"Loved this book , can’t wait to read the sequel. I hope to read more stories from you . Thank you so much "
Superb!
"Very well thought out. Love the plot and twists. Dislike reliving the same scenes in a separate chapter. "
Discovering Freya
"Really enjoyed tj8s story. Love the family she ended up with. Looking forward to see where this goes on the next book "
Adoré ❤️
"Histoire bien ficelé adore "
Plot kept me going
"Before anything else, I’d like to emphasize that I really did like the overall story. Characters were more than two-dimensional, so definitely a plus. I didn’t even mind the shifting points of view. But... There are a couple of things that made reading the story very difficult. 1- Punctuation is your friend. We don’t eat kids. This is especially important in dialogue. Punctuation goes a long way in setting tone and perspective. 2- Edit, edit, edit. I get it. Many writers wants to get their creations out there. But readers need a good edit (or two or three). When reading flow is interrupted because it takes a few seconds to figure out what is going on, many readers give up. Grammar, spelling, and again punctuation is a critical part of writing. 3- Don’t rely heavily on “copy paste”. In other words, don’t rehash the same scene over again through different eyes. Decide whose point of view is more important, then share the other perspectives (if relevant) in different ways. 4- Description is just as important as dialogue. You don’t have to go crazy and describe every little detail. And definitely don’t rely on the same way to describe actions. There are so many different ways to describe laughter then just “laughing my ass off”. 5- Make sure your characters are true to their nature. Cass is a hard one for me to get the hang of. I don’t know of any 14 year old boy who would put up with consistently being called infantilizing names like sweetheart and babe. Especially a 14 year old vampire. Truth be told I wish there was a bit more development of the vampires as a whole. Overall, like I said, I really did enjoy this story. The characters are really fun to read about. Looking forward to reading the next and seeing how your writing develops. "
Discovering Freya
"What a great start on this story! Lots of great characters both protagonists and antagonists. There are a bunch of sprite, lycan, and wolf characters to keep straight as well. The goal that the main characters need to achieve is along the lines of a quest which definitely prepares the reader for a “long haul” to reach a conclusion. The characters that you surround Freya with that are trying to help her are wonderful caring people. They are the kind of people every abused and broken person wishes they had in their life. They are more a family than her biological mother and stepfather could ever be to her. I found the plot to be attention grabbing and holding, especially in the sense of achieving justice for Freya and the Alpha family and later her vampire family. Freya is now surrounded by people who love and wholeheartedly support her. This is something she only had a taste of with the Alpha family. I am excited to find out how this helps her in the next book. Aspects of the story I would change or repair include the many mistakes I encountered dealing with word choice, correct use of word form, and word flow. There were times I had to guess what the author intended to say rather than just read what was written. There are so many instances of using the word ‘your’ when -you’re- was the correct version to use, I can’t give a number. There were also many mistakes involving verb tense (past, present, future). These kinds of mistakes affect the flow of the story making it harder to read. There were also places where the words seemed out of order, had one or more words than needed, or not enough words. I am sorry if I spent too much time explaining here to the point of sounding like I’m harassing you, that is not my intention. I wanted to share the kinds of mistakes I saw so you could find and correct them more easily, and avoid making them in your awesome future as an author. One last note. Jackson. He is a main character in your story but has very little character development. We know he loves Freya and family, that he is intelligent and determined because he did so well in school. Other than those things however, we do not know much about him. All we have seen is one night of passion with Freya and a lot of frustration and arguing. I really feel he needs more development into his personality and the type of man he is going to be both away from Freya and with Freya. I also think their relationship needs more development, either in the form of flashbacks or during the story, or both. Jackson’s and Freya’s relationship is a part of the draw to this story, invest in both of them. "
