What is your opinion?
Appereciation And Commission Request.!
"Just finished your story and I have to say it was truly compelling. Your characters felt alive and well-developed. I’m a comic/manga/Webtoon artist currently taking commissions (covers, pages, scenes). If you ever want to turn any part into visuals, I’d love to collaborate. Let's connect: flemingmichelle28"
Powerful Perspectives in a Chilling Tale
"This novel kept me hooked, and I loved how effortlessly it pulled me into the story. The chapters are short but highly effective; if they were longer, I don't think they'd have the same impact. The sense of helplessness and the girls' unique perspectives while trapped reminded me of the Gary Heidnik case. There were a few minor grammar errors, but nothing that took me out of the story. One suggestion I have is to include some early identification of who’s narrating in the later chapters, as it sometimes took me a few paragraphs to figure it out—though that may have been the author’s intent! I’m really looking forward to reading more, especially to see how it all ends!"
Page Turner!!!
"A thriller indeed!! I am a fan of King's novels. Gripping, 😱, suspenseful novels that get you always on your toes. This one is a page Turner alright... A contemporary novel, centred around four characters. It's partaking to the modern setting. I love the writer's style of highlighting each main character, laying down the cards, if I am to say. And the plot is gripping, even though there are a few grammatical errors and typos, which are fixable. A Spine chilling story. I want to know the end. Can't wait to finish this. I just had to pause to leave some words. A must read, everyone. Keep it up, Lina!!! 🥶🌞🥶❤️"
The night prowler
"It's an amazing book. I am absolutely hooked up✨. I just love how you portrayed the characters. Everything is amazing. Keep up the good work! ❤️"
The Night Prowler
"I like how the story is structured. I also like how you gave the kidnapped girls backstories on how they got kidnapped. I think it adds to the book helping people understand more. I encourage you to keep writing. You're doing great at it, Lina. Can't wait until it updates."
Interesting read
"The story starts off captivating jumping straight into the plot able to sympathize with the their situation. Would recommend not starting so many sentences with 'I', but an interesting beginning. "
Distictive style of writing
"This thriller story is truly captivating, and the author’s distinctive writing style made it even more enjoyable. I really loved reading it! "
Masterfully Executed, Incredibly Tense
"The Night Prowler is an incredible piece of writing that encapsulates the horrors of abduction and abuse. The story begins with a basic yet spine-chilling outlook on the 4 girl’s lives, and then it gives a simple yet gruesome depiction of their kidnappings. The exposition is masterfully handled, and the tension and thrill is intense and palpable, which is complemented by a great writing style. The exposition is interesting so far, and it keeps the reader hooked and waiting for more. Definitely worth a read!"
the night prowler
"i absolutely loved it the story is compelling and does send chills down our spine to think about being abductive it was a short story but it was really immersive. i would like to suggest the writer that they use more uncommon verbs and nouns to create a explicitly chilling contrast of words. Overall i really really like this story, looking forward to read more of this as it did peek my curiosity. "
Has potential.
"Any story, from the reader's perspective, is partly plot, characterization, and conflict (the big three). The other major aspect is execution. The Night Prowler story needs polishing. There are punctuation issues. Minor stuff, but all these distract the readers. Secondly, the scenes/ chapters are bare, can do with an infusion of sensory details and descriptions. The chapters are too short, and most have large empty spaces ( a formatting issue) and could be combined into 1 or 2 chapters that need a lot more meat on them. Also trim down the adverbs and adjectives. I was given three pieces of invaluable feedback when I began seeking feedback on my first finished novel in 2015: 1) Use the least number of words to say the most you can. This includes active vs passive voice, eliminating filler words, etc. 2) Whatever you write, read it aloud to check for tone and flow. 3) Writing is art, words are your paints, your narrative is the brush. 4) This is something I realized helps me: Show what is important (emotions, motivations, trauma, dreams, desires, conflict, etc) and tell what is not important. Each chapter has various elements (setting, mood, tone etc) I suggest adding them to your chapters which are very short. The positive is the Kiss The girl's vibes of the plot and conflict (kidnapper vs his victims) is good. First drafts are messy, so all you need yo do work to build on what you have. Make each chapter a mini episode of a TV serial, Use your words draw the settings, characters, mood, details, actions and reactions etc. Keep writing, my friend. "
