What is your opinion?
Good show!
"************************************************************************************************************************************************* I liked the imagery and desperation of the main character towards the end. Perhaps a bit detail heavy in the beginning though."
Damn
"Well damn, the end was kind of a punch in the throat. A nice little story overall, I'd say. A bit more of a teaser than a short story imho. I'd say i'm interested to read on, though I don't know who any characters would be"
Author Shows Potential
"I liked your description and the idea of hunting aquatic herds. Really cool idea! And I liked how you wrote about seeing the herd through the blue waters, and the shunken ship and all. On the negative side, I found the dialogue extremely difficult to read, with apostrophes seeming thrown in at random sometimes, and at others - where they're needed - they arent there. As in the first sentence of the story: “Rains uh’commin...” Most of the description is good and the story shuttles along pretty fast, with nice new elements. I'd re-read it to fix all the grammar and narrator issues though, if I were you. At one point, the heroine's attack is decribed as "impressive," and I wasn't sure who was telling me that. And some sentences dont make sense, grammatically. The switch to a non-foreshadowed narrator at the end is quite abrupt, too. Overall, you show promise, though!"
