Intricately Created

"The story was vivid and highly interesting. It immediately grabbed my attention and I read all the 10 chapters in one go. There was a lot of depth given to each character and their transformation made perfect sense, thanks to the boastful explanation provided by Josh in the final chapter. My suspect was Liz because she seemed to be the main protagonist of the story, and her being evil would be a cool twist. But the reveal of Josh as the perpetrator was also very shocking. Josh seemed to be the most honest of the lost, driven to righteous anger by Sophie's transformation. Edward's victory was sweet and dramatic - I did not expect the story to take such a turn that the butler would take revenge on his master. The part which was most gut-wrenching was poor Liz and Scott. The two were so cute together, and so awkward when Josh made fun of them. Barry turned out to be a bad person, which was perhaps hinted at by his unusual guilt over Darren's predicament. And finally, Bobby becoming the hot vixen was just so hilarious! His attempt to seduce the unwitting Edward, his booze-induced craziness really helped to bring the character to life. The grammar and punctuation was terrible. There were frequent changes in tense, and numerous misspellings. I would request you to kindly review your work before posting it on a public forum. The story was fun to read, funny yet terrifying at the same time and incredibly fast-paced. It was a wonderful effort by you, and I have become an ardent fan!"