What is your opinion?
The perfect makings of a horror movie!
"This story very much reminds me very much reminds me of the movie "Halloween!" This is perfect for me since this holiday is coming up!"
That It Factor
"By It, I do mean to allude to Steven King's It where the entire movie/book had that certain vibe to it that always led to an itch residing in the back of one's neck. That itch is what leads one to want to read to satisfy the monster within, but always wanting to turn away so as to not provoke the itch any further. Nevertheless, the twists were exciting as well as worthwhile to be thrown into, much as a water slide in the dark. You never expect the twist, but you are excited when it happens."
Overall Review for Cryptic
"I overall loved the book; it had sone very nice twists (feeding a corpse to Deb) and it was very detailed. It had a nice creepy thrill feel as well as a mystery element. It kept my attention the whole way through, which is something that rarely happens for me. There were bits that could have been left out, but really, it was a very nicely written book. There was a seamless transition from the two plots, or views, into one story. I enjoyed the focus on Gus and how descriptive the murders were. The relationship between Gus and Gage was interesting. Making Gus driven and Gage beyond intelligent showed nice contrast. They also had great backstories. I would love to have a hardcopy of this book in my library. Look forward to reading more of your work! "
Cryptic - Review
"It was an absolutely chilling start to this book which set the scene straight away. However, I did wonder how someone so young would have acquired the knowledge to avoid capture right at the start. This is answered in the second chapter, of course, but that seemed too much like a Deus ex Machina moment to me – I’m sure that this paranormal element could have been introduced in some less obtrusive way, essential though it may be to the story. I think that the story does deal quite well with the dichotomy of a diseased mind living a normal life, but I have to say that I do find the subject matter very distasteful. It is almost as if it glories in the actual act of killing for killing’s sake. This has to be a consequence of the story, not the story itself. I like the way that the story jumps from Gus to Gage and back again, but this split needs to be clearly demarcated in the test – it isn’t at the moment. I did think it a bit convenient that he could get at Terri Jo’s car so easily. I also found it strange that Gus’s wife was so accommodating with his living in his apartment and only visiting home, and I generally found that there was too much inconsequential dialogue (which was sometimes too stilted) which did not really carry the story forward. That apart, the writing was competent, but it does need a lot of tightening up. With the crux being Gage’s involvement with Gus, I felt that it was way too long before that became fully established. I read with some interest for a few chapters, but as the killings became simply episodic I’m afraid I lost interest quickly. I didn’t really see the point of introducing Charles Manson into the story I did find the concept interesting but exceedingly creepy in the wrong sort of way – almost pedophilic in places and I’m sure that isn’t what you intended. To my mind the story concentrates too much on Gus. Sure the story is all about Gus and his murderous activities to start with, but I feel it would be a better story if the main protagonist was Gage and his attempts to solve the crimes rather than his becoming a serial killer – although I can appreciate the twist that this gives the story. In short: a good concept but wrongly inflectioned in my view that would benefit from a severe editing and a radical change in direction . If you should feel able to give any feedback on any of the following, that would be appreciated, although you will find any of them the polar opposite of Cryptic: To Hell with the Harp! www.inkitt.com/stories/149100 Slippered! www.inkitt.com/stories/148145 Hair of the Dog www.inkitt.com/stories/147116"
