Inkitt
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"First some positives: You are a good writer. Your prose is generally easy to understand yet quite expressive. Technically the writing is very good, with few (but some) errors in grammar and spelling. Unfortunately I found the story to be relentlessly depressing. Of course I don't expect my fiction to be all about heroes saving the victims and slaying the monsters, but there has to be a reason to keep reading. As it was, I barely made it through the 20 chapters. Nothing much happens as the protagonist recites his endless litany of pain, tedium and pointlessness. Given his situation, that is not so surprising, but we lack context as to how all this came about, and that would have made it far more interesting to me. Of course we know it is the result of a nuclear holocaust, but that is about all we know: no details are provided. A backstory would have made the whole thing much more palatable to me. In addition, the narrator is not a very sympathetic character, and in the end I can't make myself care what happens to him. The fact that he is the only character with any development in the story does not help matters. I guess what I am saying is that you have to give the reader a reason to read on. In this story, there is simply no hope for any sort of a resolution beyond slow, relentless decline and death. So I won't be reading any more of it. I realize this is a negative review, but I have resolved to be honest in my reviews. There seems no point otherwise. However I understand if you do not want this review to remain, and I don't want to drag you down as a writer. Therefore I will remove this review if you ask me to."

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