What is your opinion?
Ramblin Rose
"The story was very well written and brilliantly executed. The characters are strong."
Nice story
"I think this is a really interesting take on your roots. I'd say just proofread your spelling, but it's a nice read despite that."
Nice Idea
"I really admire the way you decided to tell the story of your ancestors. I think it's one of those things which are really important, and I also think the amazing people out there should be remembered. So, I admire your decision to write this story. You also didn't have too many grammar mistakes, I thought. The only thing I need to critique : and this is why I gave it a three : is that I was confused from time to time. I think you need to give more grounding about the characters so that I can easily remember who is who. In the fist chapter, the first few sentences pulled my in immediately. On the other hand, I got confused about which grandpa you were talking about as it turned from somebody's grandpa to my grandpa and back to somebody else's. Or perhaps that was just me? Also, if you do know what truly happened in the past, a few more details or perhaps dialogue would be nice - although the current amount of dialogue is perfectly fine too. I loved how you showed the people and the few speeches you did include were defining and nice. Again, a few more details would be nice - and also if some things went slower (but that goes along with description.) However, I don't usually read non-fiction, so my tips are purely observations I think may be useful. Again, this is an important, great story, so please don't take my extensively-explained critique as something bad. This story has true potential - it just needs a teeny bit of work. I hope this helps! Good luck with the novel!"
