What is your opinion?
Opposites Attract
"At first I didn't realise that this was a thor/Loki piece of fan fiction. I haven't seen the movies, but to Selenta's credit seeing the movies is unnecessary as the story is completely stand alone. With short concise chapters the action keeps moving along quickly. I'm interested to see where the story is headed."
Needs Work
"Your story is interesting. I didn't realize this was a Loki fan fiction at first at least until I continued to read. Try to be a little more descriptive with scenes, feelings etc. Make sure that you set up your setting right so that they pull in more readers. You're listing things and rushing through scenes. Dialogue is important but you're not focusing enough time on emotions and setting up scenes as a whole. Doing this creates connections between the readers and your characters. I know descriptions are hard but for scenes, people and emotions you need to do this to set the mood in your story and have the reader feel what you want your character to be portraying at the moment. When it comes to POV's I also tend to switch back and forth. I was a bit confused in the beginning as to what was going in in the beginning because of the short introduction. "We met at a club" Describe the scene around him. Set the mood, describe the club and what he felt the moment he set his eyes on Kate and vise versa when she herself talks about the encounter. Overall, I think this has potential."
