What is your opinion?
Lovely Mesoamerican Adventure
"I quite enjoyed this story, and I'm okay with the lack of exposition on Tepin. For the purposes of the story, we really didn't need to know exactly how she could do this or that. It added a bit more mystery and wonder to the piece. A slight criticism of the opening sentence though: I feel like you don't need that "nearly" before "impenetrable." This is really nitpick-y of me, but I guess this jumped out and bit me because it's the opening sentence of the entire piece. It was a bit jarring to me, but that's just my opinion. Other than that, I was very pleased with it. I so rarely see anyone playing with Mesoamerican lore that to stumble upon this morsel on my first foray into this site was awesome! The plot was creative and very sweet."
Heart-wrenching
"This was a really great story! I loved the whole thing, the interaction between the girl and the panther, and how it ended. One thing: I wanted to know more about the protagonist. Why was she an outcast in society? Why was her skin fair? Was everyone's? A little more character development would help that end scene pack a little more punch. Good luck in the contest!"
A Beautiful Story
"I loved the story, the plot was intriguing and I never lost interest once. Your way with words is also great, I was pulled into the story immediately. The relationship between the two main characters was heartwarming with the trust, loyalty and devotion they showed to one another. The ending surprised me slightly but in a good way. Great job!"
