I love the smell of world building in the morning.
Seriously, the more I read of this world, the more I love it! The world building going on here is really nice. There were a few typos, but nothing that really detracted from the flow of the story. I also like the voice you've given Ixchel. Properly alien to a normal, empathic human being, but at the same time, eerily sympathetic. She's just trying to survive as best she can, and if that means a few sacrifices along the way, well . . .
Personally, I would love to see more of these little character studies. If you are going to publish your novel here, I will definitely read it!
Lovely Mesoamerican Adventure
I quite enjoyed this story, and I'm okay with the lack of exposition on Tepin. For the purposes of the story, we really didn't need to know exactly how she could do this or that. It added a bit more mystery and wonder to the piece.
A slight criticism of the opening sentence though: I feel like you don't need that "nearly" before "impenetrable." This is really nitpick-y of me, but I guess this jumped out and bit me because it's the opening sentence of the entire piece. It was a bit jarring to me, but that's just my opinion.
Other than that, I was very pleased with it. I so rarely see anyone playing with Mesoamerican lore that to stumble upon this morsel on my first foray into this site was awesome! The plot was creative and very sweet.
A Story Worthy of the Doctor
Honestly, I wasn't sure I wanted to read this at first, but after about the second chapter I started getting into it. The timey-whimey shenanigans were a bit hard to follow, but I had to know how it all turned out! I did like the fact that as Lyn got closer to the present, the Earth Trolley cart began to degrade. It was a nice touch.Read the story now
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