What is your opinion?
Marylene:
"ooh my God!! this story is so interesting and i have found my self wasting all the time just reading this Drama. its like a movie, ooh my God i cant wait for another novel from you Aryeen keep on your Talent"
Needs Some Work.
"You remind me so much of when I started writing. You have a good idea as to where it is you want to take your story which is a good thing. However, there are a few things that you need to do in order to polish your story just a bit and improve as a writer. I myself still struggle with these things so don't worry too much about grammar and punctuations when you write at this point but do try to go back and read your own things in order to catch a few things you might have missed. Be more descriptive with scenes in your story along with feelings and character descriptions. This will really help pull in an audience emotionally. I noticed you have a lot of dialogue and its not necessarily a bad thing but you're not setting up your scenes well enough so that readers can imagine what you're seeing as you write. You want your vision to go out just like you yourself are thinking as you write it. Don't give your characters name Jessie: and then give the dialogue. Or write (I shouted) use quotations when you write so as to not cut off from the story. It feels more like a script to a play when you do that. I myself have a few things to polish in my own writing as I mentioned before mainly my Punctuation and Grammar but I still do struggle with descriptions which I know are very hard. Dialogue and the way you do it is important it can either give more or take away from your story. Go back to your favorite book and study it. By that I mean, check the way the author writes when their characters are speaking. What tone they use when the character is thinking something, how they portray feelings and how the author sets up settings. Then go back to your writing change what you can, read your own stories and figure out what your style is and in time you will be able to slowly begin to polish and perfect what you write. I hope this helps and Good Luck with your story!"
